Professional paralegals should be pros at concise, clear writing. Today’s exercise is to fix this excerpt from a brief spotted by Tom Freeland at NMissCommentor:
The miniscule mention of abuse in the affidavits is insufficient to find the Mississippi Supreme Court’s decision was unreasonable in finding there was no deficient performance and that there is no prejudice. Nor is the decision of the district court wrong in finding that the state court decision was not unreasonable.
I’m assuming with some confidence (translated: hoping) that this was not drafted for an attorney by a graduate of my classes.
Bonus points if you can fix make this clear and concise while keeping the alliteration!
As far as I know there have been no formal consequences to the author. However, on possible consequence of poor writing is that samples may be posted on blogs, so this goes into the “Consequences of Sloppiness” category.